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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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Genes has a great impact in our personality, but it is not necessarily what predetermine our personalities. There are
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 aspects
thats
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that's
contribuite
bestow a quality on
contributed
with
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to
 the basis of the person who we become.
To begin
 with, our personal formation could be affected by the social interaction, culture and the people
sorrownding
closely encircling
surrounding
 us. Though personality development is a complex process, in my personal opinion genes is only one of the many aspects influencing the
presonal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
 formation.
First
to
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of
 all, and foremost our family roots have a deep influence in our overall personal formation.
In
addition another
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addition, another
 important aspect influencing our identity is the culture, I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
believed
 that culture is another
importat
of great significance or value
important
 element
contributin
tending to bring about; being partly responsible for
contributing
contribution
contributions
 to build our identity
.
Accept space
.
Therefore
, genes are not the only factor that
define
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defines
 us as a person, and I
undoubtly
without doubt; certainly
undoubtedly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
 that your
personalities
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personality
 traits could be modified in
ever
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
 stage of your life.
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