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The qualities and skills that a person requires to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or any other academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that the higher education system
today
 does not provide the tools needed to accomplish the future life goals of the students. In my view, I agree that current university and academic curriculum must be revised to encourage certain qualities of the pupil.
To begin
 with, the degree and diplomas nowadays do not include the subject that promotes skills
such
 as entrepreneurship.
As a result
, the students produced by these
institutions lack
Accept comma addition
institutions, lack
 of the creative and innovative ideas, which are the main factors to be successful in the
today
's world.
Moreover
, these curriculums primarily contain the subject matters that had been found by others. 
Moreover
, all most all the higher educational institutes still believe in traditional exam based testing mechanism. Unfortunately,
this
 particular method only assists the capacity of memory of an individual rather than the intelligence of that person.
Furthermore
, the professional world in
this
 decade
is consists
Suggestion
consists
 of jobs that are based on  project delivery methods. In order to do
this
 one must have previous experience of handling a task assigned to it by itself.
Then
 again, these valuable skills are not taught in tertiary leaching institutes
today
. Another important quality is the team working capability, which is a must in every employment placement. Each and every person need a team to gain any achievement in their life. Therefor, effect of teamwork will be enormous in the future
endeavors
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
  of any professional person. In conclusion, due to numerous reason
such
 as lack of support for entrepreneurship and teamwork, it can be argued that higher education system
today
 does not support the future perspective of graduates and undergraduates.

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