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Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on our health and society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for their work.

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It is believed that the existence of cellular
phone
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technology
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 has created social, medical and technical problems for individuals and societies. I personally disagree with the thought, if people think that there are more disadvantages than the advantages of cell phones and the following essay will discuss
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 issue in details.
To begin
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 with, it is true that the development of mobile
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technology
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 has created some problems for human kinds.
Firstly
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, many people believe that the wireless
phone
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technology
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 has made people become more individualistic. In the most common case, many families are having communication problems these days, due to each member of the family are busy with their devices.
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, it has been reported that the wireless
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 has some negative effects on our health. Many scientists believe that the
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 has become one of the contributors to human's brain damage and trigger brain cancer as well.
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, it has been reported that some people have been injured due the technical problems of the
phone
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 itself. There have been cases where the battery of the
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 had exploded when it was used to make
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 calls, and it caused serious injuries to the user. Despite all the social, medical and technical problems of mobile phones, I do believe that the existence of the device brings a lot of benefits for human beings. Mobile phones can be used to connect to a specific person, though the person might be travelling to other places. And
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, with the various
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functions
 of mobile
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technology
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 nowadays, it can be used to send and received important emails.
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 that, with the chatting application that could be installed on the phones, it has made distance communication become cheaper. And
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 but not the least, the
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 can
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 be used as a navigation system to find a new area or new address. In conclusion, it is true that handheld
phone
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technology
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 has caused some problems for mankind, but I disagree with the opinion that the problem of these phones outweighs the benefits. I do believe that
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the mobile phone
phone
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 has assisted the human being in various ways and it is the irresponsible act of humans themselves that has caused the problem.

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