Some people believe that technology, such as smartphones and social media, has made our lives more complicated rather than easier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The growth of
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has become increasingly noticeable in recent years.
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some people believe that it has made life easier, others argue that it has made life more complicated.
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essay will discuss both views and explain my opinion. On the one hand,
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, especially smartphones, helps people perform their daily tasks more efficiently.
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, there are many applications for food delivery, groceries, and medicines, which save time and effort.
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, many business meetings are now held online through social media platforms.
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of travelling long distances, people can complete their work quickly and easily.
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, some parents are concerned about allowing their children to use smartphones. They believe that excessive use can have a negative impact on health, education, and social skills.
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, a recent study by American researchers found that many cases of anxiety and depression among teenagers are linked to comparing themselves with others on social media.
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may lead to serious problems and a decline in academic performance.
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, parents should monitor their children’s use of
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carefully. In conclusion, I believe that
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has both advantages and disadvantages.
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, its impact depends on how it is used. When used wisely, it can provide effective solutions to many problems in modern life.

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Make your main view more clear from the start. You say you will discuss both sides, but the question asks how far you agree or disagree.
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Add one more clear reason for your own view, so your answer feels more full.
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Use examples that match your main point more closely. The child example is good, but you can also add an example about adults and daily life.
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Link your ideas more directly. Some parts move fast from one point to the next.
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Use topic sentences that show the exact point of each body paragraph more clearly.
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Your conclusion is clear, but it would be stronger if it repeated your level of agreement in a more direct way.
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You have a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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Most ideas are easy to follow and the order is logical.
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You answer the topic and give points on both sides.
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You use a real style example about social media and young people.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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