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Some people believe that it is a good idea to share as much information as possible in scientific, research, business and academic world. Other believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that making
information
 found in
research
, or another source of knowledge publicly will probably be beneficial for the society and the country.
However
, some think that some data are critical to be viewed by anyone. In my opinion, Allowing the
information
 to be public is both beneficial to the scientist and the country. Knowledge has many shapes to have all these forms shared publicly is most beneficial to the community.
In other words
, complex ideas and concepts can raise the awareness of the public.
For example
, having scientific researches available is an advantage of regular people and
also
, scientists. Making
information
 accessible will enrich many individuals;
consequently
, it may result in stimulating new ideas for the benefits of the
research
.
In addition
, researches which are made public allow the public to understand its value and mostly increase their support in funding it. Knowledge has many shapes to have all these forms shared publicly is most beneficial to the community.
In other words
, complex ideas and concepts can raise the awareness of the public.
For example
, having scientific researches available is an advantage of regular people and
also
, scientists. Making
information
 accessible will enrich many individuals;
consequently
, it may result in stimulating new ideas for the benefits of the
research
.
In addition
, researches which are made public allow the public to understand its value and mostly increase their support in funding it.
result
Suggestion
Result
 in stimulating new ideas for the benefits of the
research
.
In addition
, researches which are made public allow the public to understand its value and mostly increase their support in funding it.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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