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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Not only people who
smoke
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 suffer from many deadly diseases, but the people surround
also
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 get impacted from that
smoke
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.
This
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 is the reason that many people say that smoking should be banned
on
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in
 public places. I am in
compete
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competing
 accord with
this
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 statement and believe that if government is not able to persuade people to leave
smoking habit
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the smoking habit
then
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 at least they should be prohibited
on
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in
 public places.
To begin
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, smoking is a dangerously bad habit which leads to number of lethal diseases like lung cancer, mouth cancer and many more. The chemicals in tobacco damage airways of
lungs
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the lungs
, blood cells and
alo
in addition
also
 weaken the immune system towards infections. Its impact is not visible overnight, but with
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the passage
 of time it causes serious harm
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to
person’s health
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a person’s health
the person’s health
 and in
long run
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the long run
 it can make person suffer tremendously from the pain it may give.
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, it has been universally proved that passive smoking is more dangerous and can cause more harm to the person’s health. In
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 way, the people who do not
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smoke but
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smoke, but
 because they inhale
smoke
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 owing to someone smoking nearby get affected by it.
For example
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, one of my
friend
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friends
 is suffering from lung cancer,
although
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 he never did
smoking
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smoke
.
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 is because of his father, who is
habitual
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habituated
 to
smoke
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 in their house every day. Owing to harmful impact on other people, smoking should be banned
on
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in
 public places and there should be separate places for smokers to
smoke
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.
This
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 problem has been realized by many organizations like IT companies as they offer separate smoking area to their employees who
smoke
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, so that other employees will not suffer. To conclude, smoking is a habit which is really difficult to leave,
hence
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, government should ensure that owing to smokers, at least general public should not be affected adversely.
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, smoking
on
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in
 public places should be prohibited and any guilty should be dealt with iron hands.

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