Some people believe that universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses as rates of obesity are getting higher and higher. To what extent do you agree?

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I completely agree with

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the idea

of making sports a mandatory part of all degree courses in all the universities. Though major objective of any university course is to acquire knowledge on various subjects in the area and complete the bachelors and master

degree but

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degree, but

still physical well being of students is

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very important. The percentage of students in obese category

is increasing

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are increasing

day by day

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is extremely worrying as it poses many risks to the health of young generation. Obesity is

manly

for the most part

mainly

because of lack of physical workout and eating junk food. From the

prespective

a way of regarding situations or topics etc.

perspective

prospective

of education, the entire focus of children in

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generation is to score high marks to get better jobs

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Because of the busy schedule

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they get very less time for physical activities and outdoor games.

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overall development

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the overall development

of students is very much required

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Thus having

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Thus, having

sports as

mandatory subject

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a mandatory subject

in university is the need of the hour

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to a fit body

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playing sports

have

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has

many other advantages

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These include better health

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improved focus and a overall well-being. There should be sports

competion

a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers

competition

and rewards to increase the participation of students.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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199 words

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