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Some people believe that universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses as rates of obesity are getting higher and higher. To what extent do you agree?

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I completely agree with
idea
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the idea
 of making sports a mandatory part of all degree courses in all the universities. Though major objective of any university course is to acquire knowledge on various subjects in the area and complete the bachelors and master
degree but
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degree, but
 still physical well being of students is
also
 very important. The percentage of students in obese category
is increasing
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are increasing
 day by day
.
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.
This
 is extremely worrying as it poses many risks to the health of young generation. Obesity is
manly
for the most part
mainly
 because of lack of physical workout and eating junk food. From the
prespective
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
prospective
 of education, the entire focus of children in
this
 generation is to score high marks to get better jobs
.
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.
 Because of the busy schedule
,
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,
 they get very less time for physical activities and outdoor games.
However
overall development
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the overall development
 of students is very much required
.
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.
Thus having
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Thus, having
 sports as
mandatory subject
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a mandatory subject
 in university is the need of the hour
.
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.
In addition
 to a fit body
,
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,
 playing sports
have
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has
 many other advantages
also
.
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.
 These include better health
,
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,
 improved focus and a overall well-being. There should be sports
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
 and rewards to increase the participation of students.
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