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It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree?

#parents #course #children
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Raising children is not that easy.
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, many people consider parenting training course is indispensable to raise young ones. According to my opinion, it is a necessity as these workshops can aid new parents in various manners and everyone should opt for these.
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 with, various aspects of a child growth and development are taught in these classes. To exemplify, my friend who recently became a mother was unaware about the appropriate diet of her seven months old daughter, Lisa.
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, she was prone to illness every now and
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 due to poor immunity caused by imbalanced meals.My friend on her mother's recommendation joined a parenting course aimed at guiding, cooking meals for infants. She is very jubilant and now Lisa's health has improved a lot.
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, modern parents have little idea of maintaining proper hygiene when they have to live with a baby. It is a tedious task for them to change diapers of a tiny toddler on a frequent basis.
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, feed must be given in separate utensils which need to be cleaned and sanitized to kill germs and bacteria. Compromising with cleanliness can prove fatal. There was a news in a local newspaper that due to negligence of a mother, her offspring died. When she was preparing supper for her young ones, a lizard jumped into it, she was unaware of
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. After consuming poisonous meal, her infant died. That lady killed her baby unintentionally. To avoid
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 hazardous situation, parenting workshops are there that deals with the safety and hygiene of the ward. To conclude, having training courses to provide guidance for upbringing a child is a boon for society. A trainee can ensure better health and safety of his baby by participating in these.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting training
  • child-rearing
  • valuable guidance
  • effective techniques
  • child development
  • psychology
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