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Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such as education and health ? To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Nowadays, the development gap between industrialized nations and poor nations goes on increasing. For reducing these gaps effectively, wealthy nations should take decisions to help poor nations in a different manner like education, health. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree with the statement. Wealthy nations should help poor countries on the basis of humanity because poor nations might be victims of natural calamities
such
 as floods, earthquakes, drought,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 as well as man-made
such
 as war. These factors are responsible for reducing or slow down the wealth of poor nations. There is a certain medium through which wealthy nations can help poor countries like education, industrialization, health and in other ways. Education is directly proportional to the development of any country. The industrialized country should donate
the funds to poor
Suggestion
funds to the poor
 nations in order to construct the educational facilities
such
 as schools, colleges, universities and remaining ones. Obviously, these increases the numbers of engineers, doctors, teachers,
etc
studies intended to provide general knowledge and intellectual skills (rather than occupational or professional skills)
arts
 which
enhances
Suggestion
enhance
 the development of poor nations those who want to develop. A huge number of people in African countries live in an inhuman condition because of poverty, unemployment, other reasons. Inhuman conditions
such
 as ineffective management of drainage system easily lead to spread diseases like malaria, dengue, plague, and others which create harmful effects and causes death in most of the cases. For reducing these, wealthy nations should donate the funds for constructing
multispecialty
 hospitals. Funds should donate from the wealthy nations to poor nations for building the industrial zones. Due to which the unemployment problem is solved to an effective point. It leads to an increase in the national capital income of poor countries and improving living standards. In my opinion, policies of the developed nations play an important role in assisting deal with the poor countries in areas
such
 as education, health, and industry.
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