The urban transport system receives more funds compared to the rural transport system? Why do you think it is so? How can it be solved.

Nowadays, urban areas are growing
in
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a fast pace,
as
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a
result
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governments invest a lot of money in the
transport
network
of the cities,
while
rural areas receive less funds for
this
purposes
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss what kinds of issues are associated with it and probable solutions
of
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them. Owing
the
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problem of funding in
a
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rural
transport
sector, lack of funds means
lack
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of
road
infrastructure, which
is apparently leads
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to
decline
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the decline
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of
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growth
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of a certain area.
This
is because a good
road
network
is absolutely necessary for any kind of construction and development.
In addition
, we can observe impassable roads and not enough public
transport
in the country. Frankly speaking, a
road
network
so poor, it is “not fit to support the rural economy’.
As a result
, country dwellers feel “left behind” and “
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the radar” with
absence
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of public services and attention from the government towards their issues.
However
, there are
few
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ways to tackle the problems associated with the limited availability of public
transport
in areas facing remoteness. First and foremost, authorities should increase the budget for funding of rural transportation system. The second step will be
addition
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of paved roads to
rural
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the rural
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road
network
in
such
way
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as
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them
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are connected to strategic points for survival
such
as hospitals, schools, shops,
churches
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and make them accessible for the
major
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of
countryside
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the countryside
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.
As well as
this
, a bus fleet of
the
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public
transport
should be increased and new bus routes should be added. These measures will help country people to improve their quality of life, seeing the development of the area will encourage local habitats to stay in villages, and the economy of the region will
be inevitably grow
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. In conclusion, I believe that
transportation
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system of
rural
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the rural
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sector should not be neglected by the government and it should be sufficiently funded as
road
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the road
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network
is
fundamental
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a fundamental
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part of regional
economy
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growth and sustainable development.
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