Culture is turning similar around the world. What are reasons? What are the positive and negative aspects?

In the past, the
world
had different
culture
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;
however
, these days
culture
has influenced other traditional customs as if
people
are celebrating
one
culture
in the whole
world
. Globalization and dependency are the contributing
factor
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behind
this
. There are several advantages and disadvantages
behind
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this
scenario.
To begin
with,
people
prefer to celebrate similar things, so that
one
corner of the
world
has the same attitude towards convention and genre as the other part of the
world
.
For example
, in European countries,
people
celebrate Christmas, Easter Sunday, and New Year.
Similarly
, in Asian terrains, young and older
people
love to enjoy the moment at the same time. The reason is that
people
would love to rely on others.To cite an instance, Asians can not produce
such
as electronic items, transports and chemicals,
while
Asian
people
can provide them
agricultural
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goods. As they interact with each other for business
purpose
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purposes
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, they have taken the
culture
from each other. The first positive aspect is that
people
are showing a sense of unity which helps them to communicate with the business
people
and
also
teaches us to make stronger relationships among
people
whether they are African, or, whether, they are Asian.
Moreover
, celebrating
same
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culture
succours
people
to reduce
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the distance between
people
, which not only
make
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makes
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them friendly
,
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but
also
enrich
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them with the same knowledge. The negative aspect is that if
people
celebrate
same
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the same
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tradition, there would be no variety among
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the nation
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nation
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nations
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.
Consequently
, the different
shade
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shades
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of colour of various festivals would fade,
for instance
, if New
year
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becomes
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one
fiesta in the
world
, other cultural festivals would extinct like Arabic's New
year
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"Maharrum".
Furthermore
, we would see
one
day,
people
are
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wearing
same
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the same
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costumes, eating
same
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foods, et Cetra. In conclusion,
culture
makes the whole globe in
one
colour which is only for the relying attitude and globalization that has both merits and demerits mentioned above.

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