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Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #railways #roads
Some people believe that railways need to be more prioritized in terms of development rather that roads. I totally agree with
this
 statement because trains are proven to be more faster and environmentally friendly. Investing extra funds for the extension of railways contributes a lot in terms of saving
time
 and money from the public.
This
 is because a single train can commute enormous amount of people and good in a short period of
time
.
Therefore
, people will spend less
time
 on transportation and can focus more on doing productive work for themselves and well as the society. Citizens of a nation can
also
 travel long distances multiple times faster than cars by just paying little amount of fees.
For instance
, the British government spends 80% of its infrastructure funds on maintaining their country railways so that people won't have to face long waiting hours for commuting.
Similarly
, trains are proven to be less harmful to the environment when compared with cars. Trains today uses fewer internal combustion engines,
thus
 reducing the potential of carbon emission. In terms of cars which emits pollution and toxic gases, the train seem more productive,
thus
 deserves development to a greater extent.
For example
, 50 countries are participating in the program organized by the UN in order to open underground metro service which will cut the usage of cars and bikes. In conclusion, a nation should divert funds towards railway construction as much as possible and specialize less on roads as
this
 aids a country to improve commuting
time
 and achieve a healthy environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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