Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts & that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view.

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IT IS OFTEN BELIEVED BY SOME FOLKS THAT THERE IS NO USE OF SPENDING
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ON THE ARTS BY THE AUTHORITIY. BUT THAT
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SHOULD SPEND ON
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THINGS WHICH MAKE THE NATION STRONG AND HEALTHY
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AS EDUCTAION, ARMY., HEALTH FIELD. I NEITHER CONCURE NOR DIFFER WITH THE ABOVE NOTION DUE TO MYRID OF REASONS.
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EASSY WILL DISCUSSES WHY IT IS NOT USELESS TO SPEND
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ON CREATIVE ACTIVITIES AND AT THE SAME POINT HOW OTHER FACTORS ARE
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NOT BE NEGLATED. TO START WITH,
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AND FOR MOST WHY IT IS NOT WASTING CURRANCY ON ART BECAUSE OF SEVERAL REASONS. TO ELABORATE,
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ALSO
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RISES
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FROM SUPPORTING
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ARTS EVENTS LIKE CRAFT EXHIBITION, TRADITIONAL DANCE SHOWS, PAINTINGS GALLORY ETC. FOR AN INSTANCE ON OF MY FRIEND IS A VERY FAMOUSE PAINTER AND SHE ORGANISED EXHIBITON IN SUBURB AREA WHERE LOT OF YOUNGSTERS CAME.
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WAS FUNDED BY THE LOCAL MINICIPAL AUTHORITY, SO THEY HAVE SELL THE TICKETS FOR THAT GALLORY SHOW,
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THEY
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HAD AN INCOME FROM IT. SECONDALY, IT IS BECOMING CRUCIAL TO PRESERV THE ANCIENT ARTS BY MEANS OF OPENING MUSEUMS AND FOR
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GOVERNMENT
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SHOULD ESTABLISH SOME ORGANIZATION TO LOOK AFTER IT. TO EXPAND IN DETAILS, MANY PEOPLE HAVE A HOBBY TO EXPLORE IT SO IF THEY KNOW WE
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KIND OF PLACE
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THEY WILL COME TO OUR TERETORY TO SEE. BY TOURISM INDUSRTY WILL BE BENEFITED. IF TOURISM GETS PROFITS AUTOMATICALLY THE
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GETS TOO.
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,
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WILL EITHER DISTRACT PRESENT GENERATION IN EDUCATION SECTOR OR
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MAY AFFECT THE ENVIRONMENT. ON THE OTHER SIDE, GOVERNMEN
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LOOK AFTER THE HEALTH SECTORS, EDUCATIONS, ARMY PEOPLE. BRIEFLY, MOST IMPORTANT IS THE HEALTH SECTOR, WHERE A LOT OF PEOPLE ARE SUFFERING FROM DANGEROUS DISEASES LIKE CANCER, DIABITIS, SERIOUS LUNGS PROBLEM ETC BUT THE TREATMENTS ASSOCIATED WITH
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ARE HIGHLY EXPENSIVE, SO
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ALSO
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DO SOME FINDING TO PART THE TREATMENT COST.
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, ARMY IS PROTECTING OUR COUNTRY BY GIVING THEIR WHOLE TIME AND EDICATION BUT THEY ARE GETTING LOW PAY WHICH IS NOT FAIR. SO
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SHOULD SPEND SOME
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BY BEING HELPING HAND FOR THEIR FAMILY. TO SUM UP,
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SHOULD LOOK EVERY SECTORS AS EQUAL, AND THEY SHOULD SPEND
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ON THE FIELDS WHICH NEED
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PRIORITY,
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DOES NOT MEANS THAT SPENDING
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ON ARTS IS WORTHLESS OR
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IS NOT SUPPORTING OTHER SECTORS.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
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  • needs of the majority
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