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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give larger prison sentence. Other, However better alternative ways for reducing. Do you agree or not.

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It is irrefutable that, larger
prison
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lay
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plays
a significant role in our criminal life. Some people believe that the criminals should like them to
crime
.I completely disagree with
this
 statement. I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraphs to come.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and the foremost reason is that with
society
's death penalty and long
prison
 is not advisable for the
crime
 to free
society
.
Although
,
society
 can benefit from their abilities, and the most predominant fact is that their arts and vital to the growth of the nation's,
therefore
 government support to survive in the country not only doctor, engineers and teacher. But, can
also
 give them a chance to grow in their field nationally more criminals.
For example
, doctor, engineers are
society
 can be contributed.Futhermore, offenders are used to develop by the
society
.
Thus
, better alternative ways for reducing rather than
crime
 is to give larger
prison
.
On the other hand
, illustrate offenders to government are use t
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of
social development economics are u
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to n
ack
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make
of road construction and agricultural.
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is
also
 o
ther
any of various alternatives; some other
another
way to reform that the low b
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nature
enter
nurture
are p
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prevented
by
this
society
 are developed beneficial at the contributed
.
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.
Hence
, Better a
ltenative
one of a number of things from which only one can be chosen
alternative
way to reducing to
crime
 is to give large p
rision.
a correctional institution used to detain persons who are in the lawful custody of the government (either accused persons awaiting trial or convicted persons serving a sentence)
prison
person
prisons
 In the conclusion, larger
prison
 and death is not a solution for an offender. There is
also
 other way to reform that,
however
, In the future we think government no hand to give capacity big punishments of criminal.
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