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Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame.  Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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While some people think that p
aparazzi
Suggestion
the paparazzi
should invade the private lives of celebrity, others have a contrary perspective.
This
 essay will discuss both views and state my opinion. In my opinion, everyone regardless of who should have a right to a personal
life
.
Hence
, each person's privacy should be respected. Fame requires a lot of sacrifice, one of
such
 is one's private
life
. As a person's popularity increases, so does the number of media houses interested in one's personal
life
 and without being careful, many unintended content can be in the news about a celebrity.
For instance
, Abraham Stella- a Nigerian musician's infidelity was exposed to her husband through a photograph of her that was taken at a private beach, leading to her divorce.
Although
 it is important to respect stars' private
life
, the impression that the media trails their
life
 helps them to lead a better
life
 because they wouldn't want acts that can dent their image to be revealed to the public.
Also
, many of these celebrities want more people to be their fan. So, they will be more conscious and do only want can attract people to them. As an illustration, an ex-housemate of a reality television show dumped his bad habits after he rose to fame through the program. In conclusion, while some believe that the media should monitor the personal lives of celebrities, I strongly believe that people should be allowed to keep their personal lifestyle private and make public only the aspects they are comfortable with sharing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invasion of privacy
  • personal space
  • media scrutiny
  • mental health
  • public figures
  • relentless pursuit
  • legal implications
  • ethical considerations
  • tabloid journalism
  • financial gain
  • public interest
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