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Students at schools and universities learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources (e.g. television, the Internet). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often claimed that students learn more information during lessons in educational institutions rather that in resources that are considered as auxiliary ones, as television or the Internet. I completely disagree with
this
 statement and think that the process of self-education with the help of the Internet is more effective that classes at schools and universities.
First
 of all, the Internet provides an unlimited access to different resources of knowledge with an immense amount of points of view, whereas teachers at
schools
Suggestion
the schools
 are often able to present only one or two ways to perceive certain events or phenomena.
Such
 an approach,
that is
 provided by the Internet, allows a student to become unbiased in his or her judgements and decisions. As far as an aptitude for being open-minded is precious in the modern world, students, who, along with school education find information on the Internet, are more likely to succeed in their future life.
Secondly
, online courses tend to adapt fast to the labour market's and students' requirements. There
is
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are
 no tedious bureaucratic processes of accepting of new educational projects in the Internet while all these processes slow down the effectiveness of traditional educational institutions.
Moreover
, in the Internet, students are able to find a course
that is
 perfectly adjusted to their style of learning.
For instance
, students can learn new things through playing games or watching videos. In result, web classes provide the recent skills and knowledge that can be obtained by students any time, in any format and on any device. To conclude, I believe that the Internet gives students more opportunities to learn things than schools and universities with their traditional ways of teaching.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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