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Some people think that fittest and strongest individual and team can achieve success in sports, while others believe that success depends on mental attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about the factors leading to the triumph in the field of sports. While some argue that athletes and sports teams with the highest level of physical fitness could win competitions, I believe psychological factors are more significant. On the one hand, I understand the reason why it can be argued that physical factors play a pivotal role in sporting success. Perhaps the major argument is that competitions’ outcomes are largely determined by physical fitness, particularly muscular strength and endurance.
For example
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, a weightlifter has to be physically fit enough to lift weights, and it is clear that the stronger he is, the heavier weight he can lift. Another example is that in marathon running, athletes have to consistently run
in
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into
 many hours, and
long legs
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the long legs
 with powerful muscles are necessary so that they can make up a successful athletic performance.
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, sports teams having well-built members could get a competitive edge over other teams and are more likely to succeed in competitions.
On the other hand
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, I am of opinion that mental factors are far more important than physical ones.
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, in professional competitions
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 as
Olympic Games
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the Olympic Games
 or World Cup, it seems that all competitors are talented and well-trained, and mental toughness would significantly affect the overall result. An athlete with the best physical abilities sometimes could make mistakes, and without willpower and perseverance, he would probably become nervous and
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 give up.
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, even a team with strongest members, if there were not solidarity and cooperation, could potentially fail the competition.
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 is particularly the case in soccer where a player could keep the ball and try to score for his own sake
instead
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 of passing the ball to other players who have better scoring opportunities. In conclusion,
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 I acknowledge that good physical conditions could bring advantages to both individuals and teams, I would contend that mental factors
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 as determination and persistence play a more vital role in sporting success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical fitness
  • Endurance
  • Mental toughness
  • Motivation
  • Physical prowess
  • Coaching
  • Training methods
  • Support systems
  • Handling pressure
  • Consistent training
  • Discipline
  • Teamwork
  • Communication
  • Athletic longevity
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