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There are fewer controls over the designs and construction of home and office buildings. So , people can build them however they like. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Over the years, there has been a reduction in laws and regulations guarding the building of houses and office structures.
Consequently
, the public is now constructing structures haphazardly. In my opinion, the disadvantage
such
 as its lack of safety outweighs any minor benefit it might possess. Admittedly, one basic upside of having less restrictions regarding housing and office building structures is that it avails the builder an opportunity to build without limits.
In other words
, the owner of the house can build whatever layout or design he or she desires and even anywhere he wants without any worry about breaking any rules.
For example
, ever since the Lagos State Government took down the laws against building storey buildings in
riverine
of or relating to or located on the banks of a river or stream
riparian
 areas, there has been a noticeable increase in
such
 structures all over Lagos.
Also
, another advantage of
such
 laxity is that individuals will not bother to get quality materials for the construction of
such
 houses and at the end
this
 will be cheaper for the owner.
Nevertheless
, despite these advantages above, I believe that there are some serious drawbacks to building houses and offices
however
 one desires.
Firstly
, the tendency of using obsolete and substandard materials increases.
This
 ultimately results in the construction of houses that cannot stand the test of time and
this
 might cause tremendous problems in the future. To illustrate, in 2015, there was a recent collapse of the Badagry High School in Lagos
as a result
 of using below par materials. The collapse of
this
 building led to the loss of many lives.
Secondly
, another drawback is that these structures might be built in
such
 a way that it obstructs flow of traffic.
This
 could be detrimental as it could result in traffic connections,
thus
, causing unnecessary delays. In conclusion, while less laws might give house owners a chance to build without any barriers, the drawbacks
such
 as traffic congestion and loss of lives outweigh any of the acclaimed benefits it might have.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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