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Computers havr changed the wat people study. What are the advantages and disadvantages of using computers as study aids?

#computers #havr #wat #people #study #aids
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Advancements in technology have made a
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important in effect or meaning
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difference
 to the way in which people are able to learn
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and though
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 is mostly beneficial
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there are
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 some negative aspects that will
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 considered. Beginning with the positive points
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the ability to
work
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 on assessments and coursework on a
conputer
a machine for performing calculations automatically
computer
 means that
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 can be saved safely and transported from place to place. Before the arrival of computers
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students traditionally had files and folders with their course notes
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and
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 took up a considerable amount of room and was difficult to keep track of
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now
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complete lecture notes and much more can be stored on a
flasg
gleam or glow intermittently
flash
 drive that can be easily put in a pocket or bag.
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lectures and learning material can be made available online, allowing for a multimedia educational
environmeng
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
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 is likely to engage a wider range of students as it has the ability to cater for a wider range of learning styles. For examples
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some students study best by repeatedly listening to a teacher, and
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 can now be achieved more conveniently by having videos available. On the downside
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there are occasions where information stored digitally can be deleted, overwritten or corrupted, all situations that do not occur on traditional paper based
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 the concern that material can be garnered from the Internet and passed off as the
students
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students'
 own
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making plagiarism a potential issue.
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the concept of plagiarism has long been a problem, and there are computer programs available today that will pinpoint the source of non
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preceding all others in time or being as first made or performed
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 there are potential disadvantages, they are outweighed by the positives.

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