A friend who lives in another country has invited you to come and stray with him/her on your next holiday. You are to busy to accept the invitation. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Thank him/her for the invitation - Explain why you cannot come - - Ask him/her about other time to visit Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follow: Dear ....

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Dear Tom, Thank you very much for your invitation

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It's a truly generous offer to invite me to stay at your place in Tokyo during my holidays. I'd really like to visit and spend time with you, but unfortunately, I won't be able to make it

due to

my hectic work schedule.

Although

, I've just started a new science project, and I've been working around the clock. It's been intense! I don't mean to complain; I've been enjoying it immensely, and the company I'm working at is actually in our old high school. Do you remember Mrs Brown, the former

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office is actually mine now!

However

, could you let me know another time, which suits you so I can visit? For me, the best time would be during the summer holidays, July or August if that's ok with you?

For example

, I am able to travel during the Christmas breaks and if you're available

then

. I'd certainly love to escape all the madness and visit you at your new home. I can't wait to hear back from you. Your friend, Darko

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coherence cohesion

Your greeting and closing need to be more formal and respectful when addressing your friend. Try to use a more appropriate closing for a letter, such as 'Best regards' or 'Yours sincerely'.

task achievement

You have effectively responded to the task by thanking your friend, explaining why you cannot come, and asking about another time to visit. However, the closing of the letter could be more formal to match the overall tone of the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

184 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Closing

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Some people say that money is the major source of happiness do you agree or disagree

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