In many countries, people have more health problems because they choose to live an unhealthy lifestyle. What do you think are the reasons for this and how can it be solved? Give relevant examples from your experience.

In my own nation, individuals have faced various types of problem regarding their
health
because they choose to live an unhealthy lifestyle. I will discuss both reasons and solutions and give relevant examples in upcoming paragraph. The main reason that people can face problems regarding to their
health
.
Firstly
90% people prefer to eat fast
food
because it is very tasty and spicy.
For example
; after eating fast
food
, they come home and go to sleep. They do not do any short walk and
exercise
. To exemplify in a better way, people eat fast
food
and avoid homemade
food
. Fast
food
is very dangerous for our
health
because it is very oily and unhealthy
food
so it is very effective in our
body
.
Hence
people eat fast
food
, that's why they face problems. Another significant reason is that people do not do any exercises because they have not time to do
exercise
to maintain their
body
fit and healthy. To exemplify in a better way if people cannot do any exercises or yoga than they never maintain their
body
fit.
Moreover
, many people are those who cannot do any job or work and they spend their time on games, tv etc. And they do not care about their
health
, that's why they will
also
face problems regarding their
health
.
On the other hand
, every problem has
solution
Suggestion
solved
that
individual
Suggestion
individuals
an individual
can take care about their
health
.
Firstly
, they can make a
shedule
plan for an activity or event
schedule
to fit their
body
.
For
example they
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example, they
can do
exercise
and yoga in their daily routine that's why they can easily maintain their
body
fit and live
healthy life
Suggestion
a healthy life
healthy lives
.
Moreover
, they can avoid fast
food
and prefer to eat homemade
food
so
then
they can easily protect their
health
from problems. In conclusion, according to my opinion, If people want to protect their
health
from
problems
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problems, then
then
they can do
exercise
daily and avoid fast
food
and prefer to eat only healthy
food
which is good for their
health
.
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