In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies?

It
Suggestion
It's
become a common trend in some countries that students take break after their high school studies. Many youngsters plan to travel and many spend their time doing jobs.
This
practice has both
cors
of textures that are rough to the touch or substances consisting of relatively large particles
coarse
chores
and cons.
First
of all,
group
Suggestion
a group
of young children like to travel and
won't
feel or have a desire for; want strongly
want
to explore new places, new people, language, culture and food. In some extend they get a beneficial knowledge about all. They learned to deal with different people.
Moreover
, they enjoyed and get some
cherish
Suggestion
cherished
memories for their life time. Despite all
this
the disadvantages are there. There
are
Suggestion
is
less chance to get admission in high ranked universities because recognized educational institutes
are prefer
Suggestion
prefer
the fresh students for higher education.
Besides
that the
gape
a conspicuous disparity or difference as between two figures
gap
Between schooling there is less chance to
earned
Suggestion
earn
scholorship
financial aid provided to a student on the basis of academic merit
scholarship
scholarships
programs.
On the other
hand after
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hand, after
school people think that children spend a year for the job. They select a job
of
Suggestion
in
their relevant field that help them in
future
Suggestion
the future
and in higher studies as well.
For
example if
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example, if
they interested in the field of computers the relevant work experience are very
usefull
being of use or service
useful
to choose future education and job respectively.
However
the disadvantages of
this
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
gape are very less. Young children are not much
muture
a vaguely specified concern
matter
moisture
nature
so, they attracted to the shinning jobs and not go for their higher studies it is a drawback.
Nevertheless university
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Nevertheless, university
education significantly important for pupil's future betterment. To
some
a quantity of money
sum
come
up with both cons and
corns
an argument opposed to a proposal
cons
con's
of educational
gape
a conspicuous disparity or difference as between two figures
gap
. It
is related
Suggestion
relates
to their personal and professional life decisions. Continuing educational Career has its own benefits. Beside that take a rest for some time period has its own consequences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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