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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I'
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 writing to you
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 because there are some issues with my
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roommate
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room mate
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 and I'
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 hoping, that we could find a solution for that. It's been two
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 now, that I'
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 sharing a
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 with Isabelle. She has visitors coming over most days of the week and they stay until late at night, without being quiet and respectful
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 So even with earplugs, I don't get much sleep. Even
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 she's always listening to loud music, which is
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 my studies
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. She's always leaving the
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 really messy and never cleans up
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 when it's her turn. On top of that, I can smell weed in our
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. I haven't seen her smoking, but she's either doing it
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 when I'
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 not around or at least she's storing something somewhere. I've talked to her about it already several times and had a friend of
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 helping with that as well. But it's not changing. So I'
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 hoping that I would be able to change rooms. I'
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 still happy to share it with someone
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 if there is no single
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 available. Thanks in advance. Kind regards Maria.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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