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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have a high-level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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People involved in physical
labour
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 should be paid equal to those having
high-level degree
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a high-level degree
 is thought by some;
however
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, in my opinion, the
work
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 involved, and the efforts should guide the amount to be paid and not just physical
labour
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. While considering salary for different jobs, the nature of
work
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 should be taken into consideration.
This
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 is because effort includes both physical as well as mental exertion. A highly skilled health professional,
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, requires years of study and punctuality to acquire extensive knowledge.
Moreover
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,
such
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 professionals are not paid at the time of their studies during college years.
On the contrary
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, a low skilled job requiring physical
work
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 alone does not need any significant prior preparation.
This
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 is a clear
example why
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example, why
 physical
work
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 is not as good as a high skilled
work
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 with regards to payment.
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, while individuals involved in physical
labour
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 often have fixed duty hours, most top skilled
work
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 does not.
For instance
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, a lawyer has to plan,
work
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, and
apply
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applies
 himself to prepare the legal documents for court trials in not just duty
hours but
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hours, but
also
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 outside it, so
this
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 means working in non-duty hours as well. Equal payment for both these areas simply means injustice.
Consequently
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, there is
comparatively more effort
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a comparatively more effort
 and focus involved in any high skilled
work
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, if analysed as a whole, and
this
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 should,
therefore
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, translate in terms of money wages. To conclude, a salary cannot be decided only by the physical
work
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 involved. Most high-level
work
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 being more mentally demanding should be paid more than the physical
labour
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work
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.
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