"Some people believe that government funding should be used to support the arts, while others believe it should be allocated to more practical sectors such as healthcare and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.'
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systems. I believe that subsidies for the latter option are more beneficial.
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people
believe that the government should focus on Use synonyms
arts
to improve their cultural affection on a worldwide scale to attract more foreign tourists to visit their country. Use synonyms
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, in the 1990s South Korea was more concentrated on production and improving the economy through technology. Linking Words
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led to a significant increase in tourism and greatly boosted the economy through cultural exports like K-pop and Korean dramas.
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education
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coherence cohesion
Strengthen the transition between ideas in each paragraph to enhance logical flow.
task achievement
Ensure that all main points are further developed and explained for clarity and depth.
coherence cohesion
Clear structure with introduction, body paragraphs discussing both views, and a conclusion stating your opinion.
task achievement
Relevant and specific examples used to support the points, such as the example of South Korea's cultural investment.
task achievement
Complete response to the task by discussing both views and giving a personal opinion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite