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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

#government #money #life #planets #people
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Advancement in technology should be for the benefit of a common man. Science’s advancement in
space
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 doesn’t bring doles to
general public
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the general public
. Many governments around the world are spending billions to study
space
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 and find lives on other planets. Whereas, many basic issues of people living on earth are ignored. I strongly agree that funds should be used by governments to benefit people and in
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 essay, I will discuss my point of view that why spending for the people living in
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 world is more important. Discovering
space
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, learning about other planets and stars can be interesting and
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,
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 may increase the knowledge of
general public
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the general public
 about our
neighboring
having a common boundary or edge; abutting; touching
neighbouring
 planets. Recently, Indian government launched its satellite called Chandrayan into
space
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 and the whole project costed around 38% of the country’s annual budget.
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, spending billions of dollars on
space
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 projects is not sensible because the result of
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 projects
bring
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brings
 small achievements,
for instance
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, discovering water on Mars and Moon. Currently, India’s 35% population lives below standard life,
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, living in sub-standard huts and begging money for basic needs
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 as foods and clothes.
Funds which
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Funds, which
 were spent on studying other planets, would have been used for the betterment of
general public
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the general public
. Income distribution among people around the world is uneven. Some people walk miles to earn food while others walk miles to digest it. It is government’s responsibility to work and spend on the welfare of
general public
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the general public
. To conclude, allocating
big chunk
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a big chunk
 of money on unnecessary things where expense
overweighs
in other respects or ways
otherwise
 the benefit and ignoring primary duties, is not sensible and
government
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the government
 should use the funds to improve the overall life standard of its people.

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