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In some countries, children under 16 are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. is this good or a bad thing.

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In many countries, teenage students are not allowed to work underage by leaving studies and using teenagers as workers are illegal. I believe
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
 must complete their
education
 before getting a job. In the modern world,
education
 is the key to every aspect of life.
without
Suggestion
Without
education
, people will not understand their capabilities.
school
Suggestion
School
 is the place that shows and identify students future path by identifying their hidden talent.
as
Suggestion
As
 an example, if teenagers who start work early will not able to see his math skill without interacting with proper teachers even the sportsmen will not able to identify his own talent until school church find out. It is known that everyone has some kind of special skill which is needed to be sharpened. It is no doubt school is the most suitable place for that. Another thing is, to perform any kind of job basic knowledge is essential like reading and writing.
without
Suggestion
Without
 proper law students motivates to
left
Suggestion
leave
there
of them or themselves
their
education
 and find a job early which is bad for the future of the world. Because of that, the
next
 generation will be unintelligent.
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