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Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it would cause problems for younger people. Do you agree or disagree?

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When discussing whether people should keep on working over the age of 60, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
Although
 some people think that allowing older employees to keep on working might cause problems with
younger
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young
 people, I believe older and experienced workers are a valuable source, and should be allowed to work. In
this
 essay, I will provide reasons and examples to support my view. One argument in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of my opinion is that the industrial field is expanding rapidly, and there
are
Suggestion
is
 sufficient amount of work places for
youger
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
 workers.
For example
, in Israel the annual economical growth is 2%, which creates more than 50,000 working positions yearly. As a consequence, the
unemploynment
the state of being unemployed or not having a job
unemployment
 rate is decreasing rapidly, and that means that even if older people continue working, there are still enough jobs for everyone.
This
 example shows that men may find jobs easily, regardless of other people's retirement age. Another point supporting my position is that experienced workers recognize financial opportunities that can save and create jobs for others. To illustrate, an elderly worker in the banking field, due to his vast
experience
 as a banker over the
last
 30 years, may recognize a chance to buy a food company that got into financial difficulties.
As a result
, the worker's
experience
 might save the company and create new working vacancies.
This
 example demonstrates that
experience
 is a valuable tool that can create substantial income and save jobs. In conclusion, I maintain that older people should be allowed to work, because they have the
experience
 and knowledge to create new jobs. We should
charish
be fond of; be attached to
cherish
 them and learn from them as much as we can.
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