More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?
In
this
era, many people tend to have a Linking Words
baby
at a later Use synonyms
age
than previous generations. I believe that the merits of having Use synonyms
children
later Use synonyms
age
outweigh the risks.
Regarding the advantages, I believe that parents who have a Use synonyms
baby
at a later Use synonyms
age
have emotional and mental maturity, so they can teach their Use synonyms
children
well. It is well known that, parents with good mental health its important for childcare. Use synonyms
For instance
, my 30-year-old aunt seems to have stability on mental and understanding well about parenting to educate her first Linking Words
children
, because she learned about parenting when she was 25 years old, before she had a child. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, 30-year-old parents sometimes have a good career and their finances are stable, so they can satisfy their families. Linking Words
For example
, my aunt who has Linking Words
children
at a later Use synonyms
age
, has prepared her Use synonyms
children
's education since their Use synonyms
baby
, Use synonyms
such
as enrolling in high-quality kindergarten and some extracurricular courses to improve their soft skills.
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On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages. It is often said that a 30-year-old woman will have a risk of birth child, Linking Words
for instance
, my friend got a problem when she Linking Words
pregnant
at a later Add a missing verb
was pregnant
age
. She got preeclampsia, so her Use synonyms
baby
gave birth early when she was 7 monthsUse synonyms
.
Correct word choice
old.
In addition
, it is commonly believed that woman fertility will decrease after 30 years old, so in Indonesia, women are asked to get married before turning 27.
In conclusion, having analysed both the advantages and disadvantages, I believe that the positive impacts have a Linking Words
baby
at a later Use synonyms
age
outweigh than negative consequences.Use synonyms
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