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Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #component #school #program
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Money plays a major role in human settlement. A penny saved is a penny earned. Students in early stages of
life
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 don't know the value of wealth. They tend to forget the hard work their parents are putting to get the fund and send them for schooling. What is learned early, stays forever. Financial literacy teaches students how to save and spend the capital. Which is much required for everybody either through informal or formal learning. Including
this
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 in academics will brings extra responsibility in the early part of student growth. Education is a multi billion dollar industry. Majority people are entering into
unversities
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
 for higher studies. Total cost required to complete a degree compared to previous decades to current is dramatically increased. An Increase in the
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
 fees, transportation, book everything is adding up. Being in school or college, students
knows
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know
 which source is better, in
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
 they can compare the value of cost proposition. Working knowledge of day to day finance will help the student decide better than his guardians. They can look for scholarships, internships or part time work, that can bring balance in the family.
Morever if
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Moreover, if
Moreover if
 nothing works
out they
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out, they
 can always reach out to a financial institutions for loans if necessary later in their
life
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. Basic financial literacy gives the platform to explore the options. What is learned in
cousrse
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the course
course
 of our early part in the
life
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 will be remembered forever. People
makes
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make
 bad financial decision and regrets that wish
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 had known
this
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 earlier. Including
investment
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 horizon, risk and returns of
investment
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 in basic education will help the individual when he starts earning. When people earning
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
in
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of
 their
life
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 span, does not plan for future
investment
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.
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 to the
sucessfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 people, they knew where to put the money and what they earned grows exponentially. There is a drastic difference that
investment
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 can bring when placed in two different baskets. Finance education in school program will support the student in
early stage
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the early stage
 of
life
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 in academics. While when he goes
for
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to
 work and starts earning, it will prevent him from making bad financial decision.
Wise decision
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Wise decisions
The wise decision
will adds
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will add
 up his financial and social status.

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