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Famous people sometimes give their opinion on public topics. Is this a good thing ? Explain to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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In discussing whether celebrities should express their opinions, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue.
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 some people believe that famous actors and singers should not state their opinions, because they are not fully
knowledgable
highly educated; having extensive information or understanding
knowledgeable
 about these issues, I believe celebrities have the
power
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 to educate and
change
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 our society, and should express their thoughts. In
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 essay I will provide examples and reasons to support my view. One
argumet
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
argument
 in favour of my opinion, is that celebrities are constantly watched and interviewed, a fact that allows them to reach many people worldwide.
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, they have the ability to create public discussions and awareness about topics they find important.
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, U2 lead singer talked substantially about the civil war in Ireland during the 90's. Due to the heavy media coverage he
recieved
conforming to the established language usage of educated native speakers
received
 as a famous singer, the issue quickly became a
worlwide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
world-wide
 public discussion which helped
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to solve
solving
 the conflict.
This
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 example demonstrates the
power
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 celebrities have and their
bility
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
ability
 to raise public concern. Another reason to support my claim is that known people, by being proactive, can educate and
change
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 our community. As an example, during the
1970's Bob
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1970's, Bob
 Marley refused to take sides in the violent acts happening in his country. In order to
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 people's
behavior he
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behaviour, he
behaviour he
 created the
first
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 "Love Festival" to celebrate peace, rather than violent. His action assisted in teaching the people about understanding and acceptance, which promoted peace talks between the rival parties.
This
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 demonstrates that
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the actions
 done by celebrities can positively
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 our community. In conclusion, I maintain that famous people should express their feelings and thoughts. More so, they should use their
power
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 in order to
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 and educate our society for the good. I believe
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 is the true
power
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 they hold.
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