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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is recommended by some people that currently we have been lots up options for anything. I
acknowlodge
declare to be true or admit the existence or reality or truth of
acknowledge
 that people have different more ways of
one
things
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thing
.
One
 the
one
 hand,
firstly
, it can be
considering
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considered
one
 particular
areas
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area
such
 as, technology people can get more than
one
options
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option
 to the device because every people have different kind of need and likes.
For example
, persons can be used
one
android
an open-source operating system used for smartphones and tablet computers
Android
 device which
is they want
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are they wanting
is they want
 and
comfirtable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 to utilized for them.
However
, maybe others would be used another android device to the same facilities.
Secondly
, people have been using different types of
trasport
move something or somebody around; usually over long distances
transport
 by the private cars or public
trasportation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
such
 as, the train, the bus, so on.
Thus
, people find many ways to reach
one
 place with help many modes of travel.
Moreover
, nowadays people can choose
different stream
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a different stream
 to a study, a job and have a fun, it is depended to
people
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peoples
requirments
required activity
requirements
, but day to day people need are changed.
Subsequently
, they have lots up choices,
then
 it is not
enogh
as much as necessary
enough
 of them because always people
requirments
required activity
requirements
 gradually increased. So, they can
also
 be selected more options to a study and a job. In conclusion, though, due to people think that in current trade we have different kinds of selection. I believe that
abosutely
completely and without qualification; used informally as intensifiers
absolutely
 people can choose many ways of choice.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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