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considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business

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Artt
the products of human creativity; works of art collectively
Art
Earth
 has been around for several years. While people who understand and care for
art
 are decreasing in number, the amount of people gravitating towards applied sciences are more.
This
 essay summarizes the reasons for shift in interest from
art
 towards other research based fields all around the globe
Art
 is historically considered a medium to express philosophical beliefs of people throughout the world. Paintings made by Vincent Van Gogh, Da Vinci
were
Suggestion
was
 way ahead of their own time. Their innovations were not lauded enough. Artists were handsomely paid for their creations by the
art
 lovers. It takes years of perfection to produce a masterpiece. It is a tough job to convey a message and attract audience all at the same time. Artist as a profession was
therefore
 considered one of the toughest. Innovations in
science
 did not have a bigger audience back
then
.
Accept space
.
 Now that internet is available to people are more involved in research and trade, even in remote areas. People can comprehend the importance of
science
, whereas in the olden
days
Suggestion
day
 value of
art
 was greater than
science
. By using the advancements in technology people can communicate and conduct business at a much quicker pace. All of
this
 whilst making money in a matter of seconds.
This
 has pivoted the interest of people towards
science
 and technology from
art
. In conclusion, with abundant resources at the their finger tips people are more focused than ever in
science
 and business fields
on the other hand
 it is difficult to acquire artistic skills. Since
art
 is a creative profession that needs time and patience to develop people prefer a much easier way to make a living which is through technology.
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