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Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.

#quality #life #cities
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The global phenomenon of migration from small towns to large cities, has brought opportunity
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albeit at a cost in the
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 of
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. With an ever increasing
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population
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, The burden and complexity of
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 increases
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the causes and solutions for
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 issue are listed below. The causes for the decrease in the
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 of
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 are primarily concerned with the increase in urbanization
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 low
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 food and air
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, and increased vulnerability of terrorist attacks, As well as the ever increasing property prices.
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 the
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 of New York has a higher
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 density, which makes it more vulnerable to attacks when compared to a smaller
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 as Ohio. The other cause for
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 problem is that due to widespread growth and prosperity
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 urban citizens, especially the less well off often experience a low
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life
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reducing the property prices systematically would ease the toll on the urban residents.To counter terrorist attack cities should embark on CCTV installation so as to closely monitor for outside interference and threats.
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 it is said that the high range of CCTV in London
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has resulted in the prevention of various terror attacks that would not have been the case if they were not installed.To increase the essence of
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, the higher authority should
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 adopt other measures like reducing air and noise pollution and improve the overall well being of the
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. In conclusion
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the bigger
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 attracts a larger
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 inflow which
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 causes pressure on existing infrastructure and security
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which is correlated with the
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 of
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.Various solutions exist to mitigate
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nevertheless
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 an indefinite solution is yet to be found.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Overpopulation
  • Strained resources
  • Commute times
  • Economic stress
  • Community events
  • Affordable housing
  • Environmental regulations
  • Green spaces
  • Urban environments
  • Socialize
  • Foster
  • Tackle
  • Strategies
  • Implementing
  • Pollution
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