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Some people think that all children should learn geography in school. However, some others think that it is more important to learn subjects that are more relevant to life. What is your opinion?

#people #children #geography #school #subjects #life
IT IS OFTEN SAID BY SOME THAT GEOGRAPHY SHOULD BE MADE COMPULSARY DURING
SCHOOL
 STUDIES. WHEREAS, OTHERS OPPOSE
THIS
 IDEA BY SAYING THAT
SCHOOL
 SHOULD TEACH CHILDREN MORE REGARDING
LIFE
 AS AS
SUBJECT
.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL STATHE THE OPINION THAT LEARNIG GEOGRQAPHY AND ABOUT
LIFE
 AS
SUBJECT
 BOTH SHOULD BE GIVEN AN EQUAL PRIORITY IN
SCHOOL
 FOR ALL THE PUPILS BECAUSE OF THEIR BENEFITS. TO START WITH, THE PRIME REASON FOR TEACHING GIPOGRAPHY IN
SCHOOL
 IS THAT IT INCREASES THE
KNOWLEDGE
 OF THEIR OWN COUNTRY'S GEOGRAPHY
SUCH
 AS, WHERE IS IN HE WORLD'S MAP, HOW MUCH AREA IT IS COVERING AND SO ON. TO ELABORATE, IF IT OS TAUGHT IN THE
SCHOOL
THEN
 AFTER THE ADULTHOOD, WHEN ONE WANTS TO KNOW MORE ABOUT IT HE CAN. BECAUSE HE IS ALREADY KNOWING BASIC ABOUT IT. AND IF NOT
THEN
 ATLEST HE WILL HAVE SOME GENERAL
KNOWLEDGE
. FOR AN EXAMPLE, AFTER SCHOLLING
,
Accept space
,
 OFFSPRING MIGHT HAVE INTEREST IN KNOWNING MORE ABOUT GEOGRAPHY,
THEN
 PERSON CAN EASILY GO FOR
FURTHER
 EDUCATION IN THAT FIELD WITHOUT CARING ANY FEAR. IF NOT
THEN
 THAT
KNOWLEDGE
 CAN BE HELPFUL IN GETTING GOVERNMENT JOBS
SUCH
 AS UPSC, GPSC ETC. IN THAT EXAM THERE USED TO BE MORE QUESTIONS RELATED TO GENERAL
KNOWLEDGE
 SO INFORMATION FROM SCHOOLING EDUCATION MAY BE BENEFICIAL IN RESERVING AUTHORITY WORK. ON HE OTHER HAND, IT IS
ALSO
 ESSENTIAL THAT JUVENILES ARE GETING ENOUGH TEACHING ABOUT
LIFE
SUCH
 AS, HOW TO BE A GOOD MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY AS WELL AS CIVILIAN, WHAT IS OUR RESPONSIBILTY AS HUMAN IN THE WORLD. TO ILLUSTRATE, AS CHILDHOOD IS STAGE OF JUVENILE IN WHICH THEY ARE EASILY INFLUENCE BY OTHER UNNECCESSARY THINGS. AND
SCHOOL
 IS A PLACE WHERE THEY ARE SPENDING THEIR MOST OF TIME IN COMPARE TO FAMILY.SO IF GUIDANCE ABOUT
LIFE
 PROVIDED IN THE
SCHOOL
 WILL AFFECT MORE THAN THEIR OWN EXPERIENCE. FOR AN INSTANCE, I GOT SOME LESSIONS FROM MY
SCHOOL
 TEACHER WHILE I WAS STUDYING IN THE 5TH GRADE. THAT TIM WE HAD
SUBJECT
 CALLED GUJARATI. IN THAT, THERE WERE LOT OF STORIES WRITEN BY WRITERS AND POEMS. AL USED TO GIVE SOME MESSAGES AT THE END OF EACH STORY. DUE TO
SUCH
SUBJECT
 I LEARNT HOW TO BE KIND TO OTHER HUMANS, GAIN RESPECT FOR MY ELDERS AND KO THE VALUE OF ENVIRONMENT ETC. IN MY OPINION, FOR ME
SCHOOL
 SHOULD HAVE THESE ALL SUBJETFROM WHCIH THEY CAN BUILD THEIR GOOD FUTURE AS WELL AS MAKE THEIR
LIFE
 MORE BEAUTIFUL. TO SUM UP, IT IS TRUE THAT MORE
SUBJECT
 GIVES MORE STRESS ON THE CHILDREN BUT IF PLAN WISELY, LIKE WHICH
SUBJECT
 IS IMPORTANT AS PER THE GRADE.
THEN
 I AM SURE IT WILL BE MANAGABLE FPOR BOTH FOR MENTORS AND FOR LEARNERS.
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