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Currently, products of skin whitening or lightening are more profitable globally. Discuss the causes of this trend and its effect on health and the society. Use relevant examples from your experiences

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Skin
 bleaching businesses have grown in net worth all around the world in recent times for a number of reasons;
however
, there might be long term effects on their patronisers. These causes and repercussions are discussed
further
 in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the
skin
 lightening market has grown because some believe that the process aids an individual to exude beauty beyond the usual;
therefore
 elevating the chances of being a centre of attraction wherever he/she is observed. A classic example is a sex worker who needs an advantage over her colleagues. A
skin
 glow will make her more conspicuous and preferred by a customer. Not only that, these products
also
 thrive
as a result
 of spouse pressure to satisfy a partner who prefers a light skinned person.
Such
 desperate partners are willing to carry out whatever it takes, including bleach of
skin
, so as to preserve the healthy relationship.
However
, there are health and societal implications of continued usage of these products.
Firstly
, they decrease the width of the
skin
 with time, that often result in poor wound healing and scarring after an injury.
For instance
, a ghastly accident victim (with a bleached
skin
) may suffer wound breakdown or non-alignment after adequate medical attention.
In addition
, the society often perceives
such
 persons with artificially whitened
skin
 to be desperate, cunning and deceptive people, because they seek to alter their natural, God-giving nature to be acknowledged by others. To exemplify, if a businessman, who lightens his
skin
 obviously, presents a million dollar proposal to a very moral and profit driven CEO, he may lose the deal to his competitor just
as a result
 of that fact. To recapitulate,
although
skin
 whitening may be more nowadays, it has its debilitating effect on the body and the individual's perception by others. The appropriate government agencies should create more awareness about the use of these commodities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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