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An international company is offering a temporary job for work experience, write a letter to apply for that job. You need to explain -where did you find this information -why you want to apply this job -what qualification you have -what position you want to apply

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest in the contractual position of
Database
 Manager at NewEra
company
 in Surrey, as advertised on LinkedIn. My name is Jacob, and I am currently residing in Brisbane
colony
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, Australia. Upon discovering the job listing on LinkedIn, I was immediately drawn to the opportunity despite it being categorized as a temporary role with a rate of $25 per hour. The reason for my keen interest lies in the fact that I will be residing in Surrey for the next six months, starting from July 14th, which aligns perfectly with the job's starting date of July 20th.
Additionally
, with an open work permit for six months and the duration of the job being four months, I am confident in my ability to commit fully to the role. Allow me to provide you with some insight into my academic background and professional experience that
make
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 me a suitable candidate for
this
 position. I hold a master's degree in
Database
 and Management Systems and have accumulated three years of invaluable experience at the head branch of Microsoft
Company
 in my home country. Throughout my tenure, I have developed a comprehensive skill set, enabling me to proficiently handle various tasks
such
 as data error identification, data recovery procedures, and data encryption techniques. Among the numerous temporary positions available, I believe I am exceptionally well-suited for the role of
Database
 Manager. If given the opportunity, I am committed to delivering outstanding performance and ensuring the seamless management of the
company
's
database
 operations. Thank you for considering my application. I am eager to discuss how my qualifications and experiences align with the needs of NewEra
company
. Please find my contact information attached for your convenience. Yours sincerely, Jacob Brown
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coherence cohesion
Continue to use clear paragraphing with each paragraph focusing on a different aspect of the letter (introduction, why you are interested, qualifications, and a closing statement) to maintain high coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Maintain the clear, purposeful introduction and conclusive statements in future letters for effective task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a logical structure, starting with an introduction of the purpose, following with detailed explanations for your interest and qualifications, and concluding with a polite request for further contact.
task achievement
You successfully addressed all parts of the prompt in detail, showing that you understand the task well. Moreover, the tone is suitably formal and appropriate for a job application, which is excellent for task achievement.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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