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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Punishing people who commit crimes is crucial to maintain law and order in society. Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of
crime
. Others
belives
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believe
believes
have believed
 that
this
 is not logical there are some other
factors you
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factors, you
also
 need to take into consideration before giving verdict
such
 as circumstances, the
motive
 behind the
crime
, etc. On the side of the argument, some people benefit from adopting a fixed
punishment
 structure for its crimes committed considerably
outway
be heavier than
outweigh
 its disadvantages.
This
 is because a fixed
punishment
 structure will save a lot of time and money that could be spent
otherwise
 on some other community services
such
 as education,
healthcare
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health care
, etc. Criminals will think twice before doing any
crim
(criminal law) an act punishable by law; usually considered an evil act
crime
crimes
 since the
punishment
 is fixed. It will
also
 decrease the
crime
 rate.
On the other hand
, it seems quite inappropriate. Human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 has different flaws. There is always some intention behind committing any
crime
. To judge a fair verdict, the
motive
 needs to be taken into consideration
also
 circumstances will come
to
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into
 picture when the
motive
 is defined. Consider a person who kills people have no other
motive
. Someone tries to attack and in
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
, the defender hunts the attacker
then
 the
motive
 is different. He/She is trying to save himself/herself. It cannot be said that he/she is a murderer. Because the
motive
 makes the difference between the same actions. To give judgment
properly
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proper
 based on any
crime
, the
motive
 seems to play a vital role so a fixed
punishment
 for each type of
crime
 seems not valid. I agree that fixed punishments for each type of
crime
 is not a valid scenario for judging and some other facts
also
 need to be considered.

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