Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult.Do you agree or disagree?

This
is challenging situation
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is a challenging situation
for both the rich and the poor students who want to study
in
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at
university for higher education.I strongly agree with
this
statement as
financial condition
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the financial condition
of poor students and not good in study for rich students. With regards to poor students, who have willingness to gain higher education from best universities but
they
of them or themselves
their
cannon.The main reason for they always suffer from
lake
the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
lack
of money and universities' enormous fees
execarbate
make worse
exacerbate
exacerbated
this
problem.
For example
, the
reacherch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
conducted by
Cambridge Economic Department
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the Cambridge Economic Department
reported that 70% of
student
who live below the poverty line cannot able to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
degree courses in universities because
insufficent
of a quantity not able to fulfill a need or requirement
insufficient
money.
Conversaly
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Conversely
, rich students have better financial condition, but poor result in competitive or previous exams
become
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becomes
serious problemfor
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a serious problem for
serious problem for
those
,
Accept space
,
because most of the universities has its merit list for admission, so if one
have
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has
to educate in
this
university, he or she have to get above or equal grades in exams.
For instance
, nowadays many rich
student
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students
prefer to study abroad
university but
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university, but
the condition of
this
univrsities
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university
universities
is 6.5 band score in each module of IELTS exams
,
Accept space
,
which is a competitive exam of an
ENglish
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
language
,
Accept space
,
But many
student
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students
cannot achieve
this
band score. In conclusion, getting admission in universities is serious problems for many
student regardless
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students, regardless
students regardless
of the poverty and the richness.Some
intiative
readiness to embark on bold new ventures
initiative
initiatives
intuitive
would be taken by
government
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the government
for
this
stddents
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
student
,
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,
since education is
right
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the right
of every
people
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person
.

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