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Inspite of the advances made in agriculture , many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Even after cutting-edge advancements in agronomy, mankind is suffering from deficiency of food-items. Dramatically increasing census results and lack of awareness of the importance of livestock seem to be the prominent reasons.
However
,
this
 burning question can be resolved by educating the community about the eventual catastrophic outcomes.
To begin
 with, the most prominent reason for never-ending need of eatables is exponentially growing population.
This
 resulted into the catastrophic scarcity of rural lands owing to the necessity of residential areas.
In addition
 to that, most of the juveniles are unaware about the importance of foodstuffs and
consequently
, it leads to more prodigal of food resources.
For example
, a survey conducted by 'World Health Organisation' on edibles dissipation reported that the hostels of premier educational institutes contribute to the extravagance of daily bread.
Furthermore
, in order to solve, one should bring awareness about population and efficient usage of resources among people about decreasing supply of food.
This
 can be easily done via social media
such
 as Facebook and Twitter. Apart from that, authorities can discourage spoiling meals by routine audits in restaurants and hostels.
For instance
, Finland government has started acknowledging the restaurants which take initiatives to avoid draining down the nutrients. To recapitulate, hunger is still a touch nut to crack for society, even after astonishing achievements in the field of agriculture.
This
 firmly signifies that we should
also
 bring our attention to other factors impacting the husbandry
such
 as the proper utilization of resources and measures to control population. After detailed analysis of
this
 topic, social awareness seems to be the most evident resolution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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