Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are various views of people on upbringing, their children. Talking about

competition

, some say that it must be inculcated in children while some argue cooperation plays a better role. In

this

essay, both these contrasting views will be discussed and a conclusion will be made. Those who believe that

competition

is necessary to present the following arguments.

Firstly

competition

motivates the children and encourages them to do better rewarding the one who stands at the top.

Secondly

, healthy

competition

maintains the excitement and zeal in learning.

Otherwise

, children may find the session too boring.

Thirdly

, these are places where

competition

is of utmost necessity.

For example

, in sports, it is always necessary to come to a conclusion on who wins and who loses. According to the opinions given by

this

group of people, positive

competition

among children is more beneficial.

On the other hand

, some highlight the negative impacts that

competition

might bring and so choose to inculcate cooperation in their kids. According to them, when kids compete, they might use alternative ways for winning like cheating. Sometimes, they might be highly de-motivated if they are constantly losing despite persistent efforts.

In contrast

, by working or learning cooperatively in groups, children learn attributes as respect, exchange of help, tolerance, etc. They

also

opine that the lessons learned in childhood lasts for the entire life and the children who always compete would do so for the rest of their lives and

this

would include both the positive and negative competitions.

Thus

, in accordance with my view, both cooperation and

competition

are essential for children in their own place. The guardians have to choose one appropriately according to the situation and context in order to ensure their kids learn correct moral values and ethics.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

293 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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cooperate
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skills
motivation
drive
resilience
failure
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approach
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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