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Nowadays many countries have very cosmopolitian cities with people from all over the world. How can government ensure that all these people can live together harmoniously.

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In today's volatile world, going abroad is a widespread phenomenon
inavitably
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
inevitably
inevitable
. An
aboundance
the property of a more than adequate quantity or supply
abundance
 of people who want to live
forign
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 countries are increasing.
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, they cannot live with local public harmoniously. In
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 essay, many points will be given with my personal viewpoint before a rewarding summary is reached.
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 of all, I reckon that going overseas is the best way to find fellows who are native and you can improve your ability of learning language.
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However some
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However, some
 natives do not take off people who are incomer cannot
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 at high level
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. In my opinion,
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 abominable side to live with incomers.
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, one of the
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reasons
 for
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 is religious discrepancies between the citizens of the two countries. In my opinion,
relegious
concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
religious
 buildings should be built by the government and in the construction, representatives of both
reagious
concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
religious
 should be involved. Taking all things into consideration, I would tend to mention that the government ensure that people can live together harmoniously
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 as citizens
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 and built
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concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
religious
 buildings.

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