Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In a year, there several celebratory events that are organized and they range from engagement parties to office parties. Few people are of the opinion that,
such
parties only deplete
resource
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resources
while I believe
such
events play an important role of developing and building relationships in the community. A lot of
resource
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resources
is used
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are used
in the organizing and execution of parties. It requires the planners to commit most of their time, money and energy in order to ensure the event is a success.
For instance
, on average a wedding costs roughly $10,000 to $20,000 depending on the taste of the couple and requires one to plan months in advance.
Such
amount of money could have been used to secure a good future for the couple
such
as investing in a business or making a down payment for a house. Individuals redirects resources to events
instead
of activities that could have been used to better their lives. Parties provide a platform for people to celebrate achievements.
Furthermore
, it is an opportunity for people to interact. We humans are social beings and through parties, we are able to connect with loved ones, form new relationships and build the existing ones. Generally, people network to get jobs, businesses or to make friends.
For example
, a wedding is where most people get the opportunity to meet their partners. Events are a way
of
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for
us to get connected and interact with one another. Parties and events play a major role in the building and maintain relationships.
Such
events may be costly, but the benefits of
this
kind of social activities outweigh the cons.

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