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In the future all cars buses and trucks will be driverless only people travelling inside this vehicles will be passengers do you think the advantages of the driveries vehicles outway the disadvantages

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With the new technological developments, there are many countries that use underground transportation with no drivers. It can be imagined that people could be transported somewhere by vehicles,
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 as cars, buses, and trucks without drivers. I think that there are some advantages of it,
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 as reducing
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 accidents and the stress level of individuals.
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, car accidents are caused by a distracted driver more than bad weather conditions, the dysfunctions of the vehicles, or the faults of passengers.
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, human beings who drive a car after drinking alcohol, neither focus on the road, nor have clear sight because their brains don't work properly.
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, many drivers use their mobile phones
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 they are driving.
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, they cause an accident because they don't have good reflexes when some pedestrians cross on their roads, or they even miss the
traffic
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 lights.
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, an automatic vehicle with advanced technological devices,
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 as wide-angled cameras and instant break systems, can prevent those accidents.
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, driverless transportation can help to deal with stress which is caused by
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.
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, the conflicts between people who try to reach somewhere in time can be reduced.
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, many men and women who get stuck in
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, are stressed because they should focus on the road for more hours than usual.
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, the passengers don't have the same stress level because they can
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 entertain themselves by watching TV series and playing mobile games. In conclusion, public transport with auto-pilot can be a dream for now. Yet, in my opinion, it can improve not only individuals' psychological health but
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 their physical health in the future.
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introduction conclusion present
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, but the introduction could be more directly related to the topic of driverless vehicles specifically.
logical structure
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complete response
Provide more comprehensive details for each main point to fully develop your arguments. Consider addressing potential disadvantages to provide a more balanced view.
clear comprehensive ideas
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relevant specific examples
Your use of examples, such as the mention of drivers using mobile phones, effectively supports your points.
supported main points
The essay effectively differentiates between the benefits of driverless cars in terms of reducing accidents and lowering stress levels.
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