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An American film actor once said, “Tomorrow is important and precious”. Some people think individuals and society should pay more attention to the future than to the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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I certainly support the view.
One
 should most definitely keep the future in mind and not fritter away everything to enjoy the present.
One
 should always remember that the present would
one
 day transform into the future, and when it eventually does, it should be safe and secure. The same holds true for societies. Let us consider why it is so important to be prepared for the coming time. The mortality rate has come down and the span of life is generally longer, but the period of earning is comparatively limited. Nobody knows how long he would live, but the age of retirement is generally fixed.
One
 cannot work indefinitely.
Therefore
, during his earning span, he has to make sure that he puts aside enough money that will hold him in good stead in his later years, when he will be able to work no more.
Further
, the requirements in old age are sometimes more than a person's
needs
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need
 during the period of his youth. Deteriorating health translates into higher medical bills and hospital charges. Being weak and infirm,
one
 needs to spend more on commuting. He will need to hire assistants to help in the house.
Next
 comes the needs of the family.
One
 has to provide for the education and marriage expenses of the dependent members of the family, like children and even grandchildren.
One
 has to pay
one
's insurance premiums, and even for the day-today needs of the younger members of the family, till
such
 time as they are employed and earning.
Moreover
,
one
 may incur extra expenditure on leisure activities. People generally travel more after retirement to meet their relatives and friends who may be settled and staying far away from them. There would
also
 be the usual expenses on house maintenance and repair, and the payment of personal and property taxes. The societies should
also
 think about tomorrow. Neighbourhoods should be planned nicely. Everyone should participate in community projects. Good educational institutes and health centres should be there in all areas. If only today
is looked
Suggestion
is looking
looks
 into and no planning is done for
tomorrow
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tomorrow, then
then
 crime and violence would increase in society and everyone would suffer.
Therefore
, it is imperative that people and societies plan wisely for the future. If
one
 has saved enough,
one
 can sit back and enjoy peace and comfort in ones later years and even witness the smile of joy on the faces of
ones
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one's
 children. If he has saved not,
then
 the journey ahead would be dreary and dismal indeed.
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