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should children be allowed to make their own decisions. discuss both views and express an opinion

#children #decisions
People have different views about the right of young children to make their own decision in their life. While some people think that let
children do
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children, do
 everything they want lead to the appearance of selfish people in a society, I think that trend will create
a
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an
 independence generation. There are some evidences dedicating that allowing the young to choose their daily routine
such
 as choosing food, clothes, and unwind activities could make they only think about themselves.
For example
, parents nowadays always spoil their children and try to do everything they require to
satisfied
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satisfy
 the children.
As a result
, children tend to get used
with
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to
 being an apple of their parents' s eyes, which develop to some detrimental
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 when they have to become a part of society when they grow up.
However
, I strongly believe that letting children decide freely bring a huge amount of benefit for not only themselves but
also
 their parents and society.
Firstly
, having the right to do their own form just
a
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an
 unimportant thing
such
 as choosing the
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
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of
 their socks could help children be more confident and not rely too much on their parents.
In addition
, it has
positive impact
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a positive impact
 to the young because they feel being respect by their parents, which can narrow the generation gap between the children and the parents.
Secondly
, if the children have to make the decision by themselves and express their thinking about what they choose, they will develop the logical thinking and build their personality
,
Accept space
,
for example
 taking charge for what they have done. In conclusion, it
seem
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seems
 to me that children could get a lot of benefit from having a right to make a decision themselves.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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