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Teenagers should not be allowed to use mobile phones at school.

#teenagers #phones #school
The technology is getting advanced with each day and so the children are getting advanced. Nowadays, everybody has a mobile phone be it a teenager or an adult or an elderly person because it has become a necessity to stay in touch with your near and dear ones. Though it has become a necessity for the parents to give mobile phones to their children to get in touch whenever they want to, but everything has its pros and cons and it is a parent's responsibility to teach their children in the right direction or set certain rules. The
use
 of mobiles at
school
 should be strictly prohibited because it will lead to a lack of concentration plus wrong society. The usage of phones during
school
 hours will ruin their career because they will not be able to focus on their studies if they tend to
use
 it during their classes when the teacher will be teaching. They might
also
 get into access to inappropriate content like porn, crime, etc. The
use
 of mobile at
school
 during
school
time
 will
also
 lead to a lack of participation in extracurricular activities and so will not be able to find and polish any hidden talent. Lack of extracurricular activities will
also
 lead to a lack of physical and mental growth and may
also
 lead to depression too. So, I support the idea to give mobile phones to teenagers, but it's our responsibility to teach them the right way to
use
 it and
also
 to take out
time
 from our busy schedules to guide them and counsel them
time
 to
time
 so that they don't get into wrong practices.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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