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Nowadays, the traditions and customs redating to the food we eat and the way we eat are changing Why is this happening ? Do you think this kind of change is positive or negative ?

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We live in a modern and developed
world
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, and
people
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 easily communicate and absorb information from the outside
world
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. Even food
traditions
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 and customs were absorbed and underwent major
changes
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. That's not
such
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 a bad phenomenon, it's even richer than the
world
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's cuisine, but it would be a pity if we only pursue new
things
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 and forget traditional beauty. As mentioned, the cause of
changes
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 in
people
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's
traditions
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 and eating styles comes from the absorption of knowledge from the outside
world
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.
People
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 are interested in new
things
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 and find suitable hobbies, which leads to change. One of the reasons why the change is positive is the greater diversity in cuisine. The harmony of tradition and novelty makes the cuisine increasingly diverse and
people
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 have more choices. From there, the taste will
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 develop, and there will be many new
changes
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 to make the
dishes
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 not boring.
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,
instead
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 of having just a few simple ingredients with the same
flavor
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, the traditional sweet soup has now been transformed and added with many attractive toppings to satisfy many diners of many different ages.
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, another reason is to popularize the images of traditional
dishes
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. The change in customs and
traditions
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 of eating to be more suitable for everyone will make it more accessible to everyone, thereby
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 making
people
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 know more about food. It can be mentioned that dipping sauces in Vietnam when slightly adjusted in
flavor
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, can easily be liked by foreign tourists.
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, focusing too much on changing to new
things
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 will lead to the erosion of existing
traditions
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 and customs. Since
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, the true value of ancient
dishes
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 and eating methods has gradually disappeared. Losing traditional values is like losing one's nature.
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, you must know how to be selective and considerate when changing or adding new
things
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 to your eating method. to protect the beauty of traditional style
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 still absorbing the new. In conclusion, having
changes
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 in traditional
dishes
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 and eating methods is a good thing, but you should know when to stop and choose carefully.
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structure
Your essay presents a clear and logical structure, making it easy to follow the flow of your ideas.
task completion
Your essay addresses the prompt comprehensively, discussing both the reasons for change and your perspective on its positive and negative aspects.
framing
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame your argument, providing a strong opening and closing.

Your opinion

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