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More people are spending their free time watching movies. Why is this? Is it a good thing or bad thing?

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Many people have watched movies every
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. Obviously, viewers can find films a different quality. Some people believe that
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 activity has more advantages, others find disadvantages. I think, if film a good quality, people should watch it. On the one hand, people like to spend their leisure
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 interesting. Some pictures could be a
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masterpiece
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 is worth it to watch and spend free
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. In
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 case, it is a good opportunity to go to the cinema;
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, for a date. At the same
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, what could be better to watch a comedy with close friends. I think, it is good entertainment among them.
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, documentaries can teach us something new without any boring books.
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, people can waste
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 watching movies. Sometimes, films can be like a drags;
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, TV shows. I suggest, people could postpone important matters to watch their favourite show.
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, film fans prefer to watch movies
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 chores;
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, they need more
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 for family and work.
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, sometimes people see a distorted reality on TV.
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, they begin to believe in fake news and images.
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, today people have
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the opportunity
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 to watch movies in different formats;
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, people should choose 3d or IMAX format to see and feel all special effects. It makes modern films more live that motivate to watch movies more. In conclusion,
it
it is
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 so important to feel the difference between
waste
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wasting
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 and watching a good movie. People can spend their free
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 watching movies usefully. I think, it is important to choose film accurately to
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do, not
 waste
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 in a future.
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