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Some people think that kids should be sent to nursery school before primary while others think kids should be kept at home with family. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #kids #nursery #school #home
In today's
time
 everybody is busy in shaping their career and reaching prestigious heights and
this
 has reached to a point where we hardly get
time
 to spend with our
family though
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family, though
 it has become a necessity for all the members of the family to work in order to get a better life.
Firstly let's
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Firstly, let's
 discuss about the people who think that it is beneficial to send their young children to
nursery
school
 before starting their primary
school
. Now a
days
Suggestion
day
 a few of the people are very determined about the fact that children should be sent to
nursery
school
 because as per them
this
 will play an important role in the growth of the kids be it mental or physical. The kids who will attend pre- primary
school
 will get an advantage to learn things better when they will start their regular schooling.
This
also
 will help them to become disciplined a little more active and
also
 gives a stress free feel to their parents as they know their dear ones are in safe hands. Now let's discuss about the other scenario
where in
(formal) where, in what respect
wherein
 the parents believe that young children should spend
time
 with family than going to
nursery
school
. The reason behind
such
 a thought is
possibly
Suggestion
possible
 to teach their loved ones the family values and
also
 not to ruin their
childhood
 by giving them any kind of stress by
bounding
rebounding from an impact (or series of impacts)
bouncing
bending
bundling
pounding
bonding
 them. Sending the young ones to
school
 at an early age might not give them the
time
 to become comfortable with their family plus might fail to teach them several social values too. Keeping them home during the early
childhood
 days will let the parents cherish the
childhood
 of their kids and
this
 creates a strong bond between parents and their young ones. In my opinion, it's better to keep the toddler at home rather than sending them to
nursery
school
 because the
time
 spent with family will give their
childhood
 a good start. The little ones can be taught at home too and if get the opportunity to stay with grandparents or one of the parents
then
 can learn to differentiate amongst right and wrong too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • early social interactions
  • foundational skills
  • structured environment
  • fosters independence
  • routine
  • collaborative skills
  • emotional security
  • personalized attention
  • family values
  • tailored learning
  • flexible learning
  • formal pressures
  • balanced approach
  • enrolling
  • early education
  • socialization
  • quality time
  • holistic development
  • hybrid model
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